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Astral_Guardian said:

Suggestion

Personally, I would have loved a bit more from the Mexican's perspective. The feel he gets of her as she slids him in; how he has more than one type of "Oh God" moment at the same time. One side of the brain enjoying while the other is revolted and horrified. Then add the babies into the equasion and it's also an "Oh Shit" moment. Not saying that what was presented is bad; just would have liked more detail to kick the disturbing factor up just a whee bit more. Get more of the senses into it; internally and externally.