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Sweet! I'm a questionably corrupt smelly Italian cop! Just like in real life! Ok, well, not just like real life.
Great opening; can't wait to see where it goes from here.
A few minor editorial comments, though - sorry if I'm overstepping:
- @11:03, I believe you say "Gladys Copenhaver" rather than Beth
- @19:58, the narration briefly turns from 1st person to 3rd. "...his pants had been patched so many times Kissyman wasn't sure of their original color..."
Looking forward to six more weeks' (holy crap!) of story!
(I showered this morning)